#1
I haven't written anything in a while actually, but I was suddenly struck with the need to put something down. That said, this is still heavily in progress, and I'm taking this from my head as you see it now, first draft.

Despite what it may sound like in this song, I am not an athiest nor agnostic (not that it should matter). But I like to explore things from all perspectives so that I may perhaps be more open-minded and better understanding. Aside from that, this is still a personal piece despite where beliefs might differ.

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I want to live forever
in a prison made of glass
captured in colors of another life
though the years have since long past

I do not know nor can I see
what lies behind the stars and sky
where my words might falter
these hands will seek the truth from lies

Immortality rests not upon a cloud
Alabaster gates or within temptation
Forgotten, wasted lives sold for salvation
Find me forever, in loving memory

Strength wasting away into atrophy
Still holding my addictions like a crutch
I remember the days when we were young
Time pulls me away, stealing what I must touch

The flesh is weak, where the spirit lives on
Take me away, into an ocean of time
time, my friend, and bitter enemy
All these moments will be lost
Like tears, in the rain
To know life, one must know pain
to see what you cannot believe

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And I guess that's that for now
#3
Quote by Delanoir

I want to live forever
in a prison made of glass
captured in colors of another life
though the years have since long past
Nice opening. The two last lines particularly. Really good I think.

I do not know nor can I see
what lies behind the stars and sky
where my words might falter
these hands will seek the truth from lies
The fourth line kinda seem out of place of the first three one IMO.

Immortality rests not upon a cloud
Alabaster gates or within temptation
Forgotten, wasted lives sold for salvation
Find me forever, in loving memory
What is Alabaster ?

Strength wasting away into atrophy
Still holding my addictions like a crutch
I remember the days when we were young
Time pulls me away, stealing what I must touch

The flesh is weak, where the spirit lives on
Take me away, into an ocean of time
time, my friend, and bitter enemy
All these moments will be lost
Like tears, in the rain
To know life, one must know pain
to see what you cannot believe
All these moments will be lost like tears, in the rain -> Is really beautiful, and would have been a better ending then the two following line. Maybe interchange them ?


Overall it's a good text.