#1
Court is in session, a verdict is pending
I'm learning my lesson as my broken heart is mending
You're standing by the jury pleading your case
Looking so innocent with that guilty look on your face
We all know you did it it's just a matter of words
So come on, admit it, I know what I heard
ILYUI is a serious offense
A criminal offense, I love you under the influence
You said it to me once again

Whenever you say those three words, it should be the most important moment of your life
How can you tell me that you didn't mean it, when it felt so right?
Now my mind is pacing, my heart is racing faster than full-throttle
Next time you tell me you love me say it from the bottom of your heart, not just the bottom of a bottle

A verdict is in
And your sentence is to spend the rest of your life in love with me again
But I'll be long gone
I'd have done moved on
Even though I said forever
But I didn't lie
Just did to you as you did to I
When you said we'd always be together

Whenever you say those four words, it should be the most important moment of your life
How can you tell me that you didn't mean it, when it felt so right?
Now my mind is pacing, my heart is racing faster than full-throttle
Next time you tell me you love me say it from the bottom of your heart, not just the bottom of a bottle

You forget when it's convenient
Even when you really mean it
But I just can't move on
So I'll keep on holding on

And next time you say those three words it should be the most important moment of your life
How can you tell me that you didn't mean it, when it felt so right?
Now my mind is pacing, my heart is racing faster than full-throttle
Next time you tell me you love me say it from the bottom of your heart, not just the bottom of a bottle
#4
Its a good writing, but it doesn't really seem as if its capable of a rhythm.

But I like it
Rag Mop Do Do Duh DoDo Dedo Do!!!!!

R_A_G_G_M_O_P_P

RAGMOP
#5
eh, it could be fit to a rhythm, and it's good man. I like it.
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#7
"A verdict is in
And your sentence is to spend the rest of your life in love with me again
But I'll be long gone"

This is the main part I was talking about, other than that it flows nicely
Rag Mop Do Do Duh DoDo Dedo Do!!!!!

R_A_G_G_M_O_P_P

RAGMOP
#8
this si very well done. Not much to critique. Not really my style of writing, but its not my call. would love to here the music behind it. Keep up the good work.

c4c
#9
i like the idea and the bottom of heart against bottom of bottle part is great. However, i think the whole thing really needs tightening up

some lines, like "I'd have done moved on" and "Just did to you as you did to I" just sound really awkward.

Overall though i love the idea