#1
Damn...I haven't been on this forum in such a long time....Anyways, these lyrics are both untitled, and unfinished, so be very constructive with ur criticism

The unresting shivers
of the midnight air
shroud my thoughts
with the presence of a stare

The stare that strains,
that penetrates,
that invites my eyes
to the ever shining moonlight
that fills my head with lies

The lies that thrill,
joy,
and love will come
with what the moonlight brings
for what it hides is what the shiver's source sings
My guitars:

Ibanez RG5EX1
Eleca Dread Acoustic
Dean ML

My FX: Line 6 Floor POD Plus

In the end, fact means nothing,
its all about perspective
#2
is anyone even gonna read it?
My guitars:

Ibanez RG5EX1
Eleca Dread Acoustic
Dean ML

My FX: Line 6 Floor POD Plus

In the end, fact means nothing,
its all about perspective
#3
Hi.

Don't bump your own threads. If you want people to read and critique yours... go out and give thorough critiques and ask them to return the favor. Plus, its only been an hour. It sometimes takes 5-12 to get comments, even if you are giving critiques and asking for responses. Patience grasshopper. For now, this thread will be closed for bumping. Go read the rules at the top of hte main forum.

-zC

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