#1
I wrote this sitting on the rooftop of the school down the street from my house.

As I stare out at this moonlit night
I begin to question my plight.
Is there a point of me being here?
Is there a point to the things that I hold dear?

As I look down at the drop thirty feet below
(such a precious life to blow)
But why not take the gamble
when my life is in shambles.

Sitting on the rooftop
on the edge of life and death
I brace myself for the drop
and take my final breath.

Isolated my whole life
You have dealt me all this strife.
If you had just understood.
Maybe my life might have been good.
Don't put those feelings on a shelf.
For, can't you see, you brought this on yourself.


thoughts?
#2
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#6
Yeah, wrong forum.

The poem itself is not that original or interesting, but it shows you have potential. Keep it up dude. (V. good for a FIRST poem, by the way).
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#9
To be the only person with a serious answer, it sounds almost comical because of the rhyming.

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#10
Quote by We Remain
To be the only person with a serious answer, it sounds almost comical because of the rhyming.

POEMS DONT HAVE TO RHYME!

lol.


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#11
mediocre...
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#12
Quote by bendystraw
poetry is for people who like balls in their face.

That made me lol loads x]
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#14
on a more serious note you have a very very good chance of surviving a thirty foot drop
so ud be on the brink of of being stupid or painfully stupid

but eah its too unoriginal