#1
So this is one of my first poems i've ever made, just wanted to get some feedback about and tell me what you think. By the way it's not the lyrics of a song, it's a poem.


Up above the moon your soul flies away
Angels gather your heart to find heaven's way
As your innocent eyes fade and hide
I cry silver tears hoping you to find

God made you a star
Because of your pure heart
And because of bright shine
Your soul lives on through time

Our souls will meet again
When that day comes I'll lose this pain
When I'll heal, I cannot say
But our bond will never fade away

My time will move on
Your Spirit shall fly on
With the stars you will rest
God knows what is best

But He hasn't called my heart
Because my life is still caught
Like a fly on a web
For the spider to be fed

Was it meant to be like this?
Oh heaven please let me kiss
Those warm lips once more
So that my spirit could be reborn
And soar into the white sky
Finding peace in my black life

Eternal memory will remain, as history will be made
Your beautiful face will never fade away, as our hearts will always dream away
Please leave a space beside your star
So that after I’m gone
I will rest beside your star


D F O I N N T D
T W H O I R S D
Y O O R U
W S I U L C L K
A M S Y S

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#2
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D F O I N N T D
T W H O I R S D
Y O O R U
W S I U L C L K
A M S Y S

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Beautiful.
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Even though I'm english..

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#4
this is a nice poem kind of has a depression undertone but still good