Last edited by blu_flame34 at Feb 28, 2008,
wow, great stuff, i really liked the imagery, especially the line, "where the deep purple skies was once filled with ripped cottonballs, where the serious trees formed ribcages above us" i could actually picture this, it really came to life, also the last stanza, i think, was a great way to end this piece. i can see what you meant when you said not to spell it out for the reader. keep up the amazing work!
I didn't care for any of the what seemed random enjambment but the words were rather great. Loved lustdrunk.