#1
out in the darkness
my heart goes
speak only silence
said the souls
who remained
in my memory
as the light
begins to leave
i hear her
memory scream
telling me all
of my regrets

so sweet
the sound
of bodies
in the ground

she starts to speak
all the memories
that i leaked
to save my soul
she says go
turn away
my mind says no
leave me be
my memories

there's only one
thing i can do
to get my mind
off of you
speaking up now
wont save my soul
suicide
solutions
take the gun
to my head
wont ever dream
of her again

so sweet
the sound
of bodies
in the ground

she starts to speak
all the memories
that i leaked
to save my soul
she says go
turn away
my mind says no
leave me be
my memories

i cant live my
life this way
thinking of her
everyday
why i did it
i'll never know
living in
the shadow
of all my
past regrets
for what i did
i, deserve to die

so sweet
the sound
of bodies
in the ground

she starts to speak
all the memories
that i leaked
to save my soul
she says go
turn away
my mind says no
leave me be
my memories

i wrote this in school, please comment
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#2
Thats a long song you got there . Overall I thought it was very well done, this line -

so sweet
the sound
of bodies
in the ground

I really loved. The message of the song isnt entirely clear but other than that I think this is a really great piece of writing. C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=796719
Raise your chalice my brother
Raise it high
To catch the fire that falls from the sky