#1
So i was working on a song recently then suddenly I just got inspired to do a new song and in a 20-30 min period I just wrote all this and put some chords to it and added a little chorus in..i was gonna post this in the riffs/recording section but the feedback i want is not on the music (its pretty crappy right now especially the random lead part I threw in for no particular reason) but on the lyrics thus far..these are REALLY rough lyrics and im putting a link to the song in my profile because personally I think it its a lot easier to crit lyrics to a song when u can actually listen to the song so yea here it is its titled "unititled song(unfished)"
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/DMBftw/

sit down wash yours hands
wipe that grin off your face
dont ya know the problems of the world
cant be solved from sitting on top of that little couch
theres people dying on the new severyones got an excuse not to see

and phony prayers fill the air
all the people everywhere claiming to be
some sorta self righteous god loving man
but you know that they dont care
cuz when the problems of the world
come knocking at their door
they just turn and run

and if simple songs could change the world
then id sing at the top of my lungs
and i know this sounds so cliche

and the people wiht the guns
and their views up on their sleeves
taking peopls lives like its some sort of game
when the powers in the wrong hands
peace is in no mans land
theres something wrong

so you wake up put on that tie
head to work think that that makes you
some sorta superman
but man wheres your phone booth cuz i dont see
heroes on the same street as me just on the movie screen

and if simple songs could change the world
then id sing at the top of my lungs
and i know this sounds so cliche

and theirs people dying on the streets
everyday a new disease and im not immune
to all the accusations that im making at the world
but you know its true