#1
[phone sound effects]

I said a lot of things I know I shouldn't have.
And, I deserve to lose you and everything we had.
I can understand why you need your space.
I think I can give you time to think.


Kaila,don't cry.
I swear,it'll be alright.
We'll pull through this like last time.
Kaila,don't cry.
I swear,it'll be alright.
I didn't mean to hurt you this time, this time.


I'm bending on one knee.
You're the last thing I want to leave.
I'm begging and I'm pleading.
I'll scream until my lungs bleed.
Don't leave, don't leave.

Kaila,don't go.
I swear,I'll be everything you hoped.
Give it some time.
Kaila,don't go.
I swear,I'll be everything you hoped.
Give me a chance to try.
Kaila, don't cry.

Kaila,don't cry.
I swear,it'll be alright.
Kaila,don't cry.
I swear,if you hang up this phone,
I'll let it all go.
Kaila,don't go.
I don't want to go..
Kaila, don't cry..
Kaila, no, don't go.
Kaila?
Last edited by NICKOLASrox at Mar 2, 2008,
#2
this song bummed me out :<

well written.
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#3
I agree with the guy above. I will say that by the end of it I was "kaila, don't go" was getting a bit old, but since that's the point of the song, it's good as it is. Just a random note: I don't know whether or not this story is supposed to have a happy ending or a sad ending, or even if it's supposed to have an ending at all, but I imagine it could be so much stronger if the last line was just "Kaila?", because it might make people wonder whether or not she hung up the phone or not Well done, I didn't find anything to complain about as far as rhythm and rhyme. Good stuff, and thanks for the crit you gave me