#1
When I'm without you,
I'm locked behind bars,
and its just me and this old guitar

{So I'm telling you,
shoot for the stars
and even if you miss
I'll still be yours}

Lost without you,
leaving the walls
of the prision behind

{chorus}

I'm wondering
what went on
so im sittin here
singin this song

{chorus}

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yeah any advice would be really helpful...thanks
#3
Quote by NICKOLASrox
cliche.
period.

that's what I was thinking
sorry, but "shoot for the stars" is probably one of the most cliched phrases ever

plus don't use all exact rhyme