#1
These are two distinct parts of the same song, at the moment im debating seperating them into two different songs entirely. Let me know what you guys think. Here's a bit of background.

Yes, these are pop songs, they're entirely meant to be dashboard style acoustic guitar only songs aimed at a teenage to young adult audience, primarily girls. No I did not write them for girls. I play in a metal band otherwise, and the constant exposure to it, set something off, and now in my free time, I play, write and sing acoustic pop ballads as a relief.

Mmmk.

Hypnotize me
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Well,
Your eyes and a story to tell
Honey pierce me like achilles
There's only one way out
Im sitting waiting,
Inch's from your spell
Watch out its unpredictable
that way you know

Hypnotize me watchin' waiting,
Hypnotize me, You know what I mean
Hypnotize me, Conspire with me
Draw me in and cast me out.

well a fatal attraction is in the way
Watch me run, Watch me fall
but dont do anything at all
Ignite me I am
growing cold but cant say

this precedents, set far to high

Chorus

Sittin here, wating on a sign from above
but you dont come no
yea, you dont come anyway
Cant your eyes, see me right here
but you dont come no
yea, you dont come anyway.

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Part two
Tell me I wont

Well if I took a chance
Would I see tommorow?
And if I were to jump
Would any of you really follow

Well tell me there is something
Tell me I wont be missing you
All this must be over soon
'cause I see the future in your eyes

One moment to breath today
I see it in your face
So farewell to old tradition
and so long to indecision

Well tell me there is something
Tell me I wont be missing you
All this must be over soon
cause I see the future in your eyes

So dont you wonder
How and when and where it could be?
So many times I hold you in my eyes
but how many will I ever really?

Well tell me there is something
Tell me I wont be missing you
All this must be over soon
cause I see the future in your eyes.

Bridge

So I must be missing,
I must be blind
Tell me im not sober
Tell me I cant find

Chorus

Well tell me there is something
Please tell me I wont be missing you
All this must be over soon
Cause I see the future in your eyes.


Its all dashboardish style, but I've got a low voice, so I tune down to c# standard, and sing over it in a much lower voice than most acoustic pop.

Anyway, keep it one song, seperate it?
Any comments appreciated
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Last edited by Zach_F at Mar 2, 2008,
#2
If you'd read it, it IS one song.

I'll be happy to edit out one part if you'd think its better separate.

Thanks.
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#3
fair enough. I'll make sure to do so next time if I have something this big.
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