#1
Fire escape becomes death balcony.
Vacation rental becomes murder limo.
Ocean tranquility becomes blood beach.

Malkmus was right: "These days are fuckin'!"
Open casket.
Spread eagle.
It's been thirteen years since I last stepped inside a church
and I wasn't going to start now.

"You ever see a man eat a knife with his neck?"

I used to sing, I did.
Poor advice.
#2
Quote by stellar_legs
"You ever see a man eat a knife with his neck?"


My favourite part. This is great, or at least, I like it.
#3
Fire escape becomes death balcony.
Vacation rental becomes murder limo.
Ocean tranquility becomes blood beach.

Malkmus was right: "These days are fuckin'!"
Open casket.
Spread eagle.
It's been thirteen years since I last stepped inside a church
and I wasn't going to start now.

"You ever see a man eat a knife with his neck?"

I used to sing, I did.

Honestly, from my point of view, this a naught but a fleeting freeverse of random lines/ phrases grouped together,
It doesnt really make an impact on me.
I also like rymes me
BUt some of the imagery is good, the death aspect was quite nice.

Crit my latest?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=802144