Sorry first post in this fourm, clearly didnt read the rules

There is no chorus just the four verses.

What do you think?

cheers james

if you want me to crit you back can u please leave a link at the end of your post thanks

Murdering his only passion.
Preying on the young and week.
The streets are where he picks his victims.
A god forsaken soul is what he seeks.

Death consumes, his every thought.
Death controls, his every move.
Never ending, trail of doom.
Death is what, he must DO!

With blood on his hands he is sentenced to death.
Straps of reprisal now seize his limbs.
Mortal injection punctures the skin.
Toxins now fill his body with vengeance.

Life leaks from his limp body.
Soul escaping from the frozen carcass.
Condemned to hell is its fate.
Tormented by souls he once did hate.