#1
Perhaps we've spun away.
Comet and gas giant collided,
comet coiling round giant's heart
but bound to come apart.
Ice armour now melted,
to recrystalise elsewhere on some other day

not really lyrics so much as poetry, but nevermind.
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I developed a thought experiment to explain why you can't remember anything before you were born:
#2
I think its pretty good. I think I would replace some phrases like "some other day" and "come apart" with more colorful wording. Try to find some wordings for those that would better sensationalize the actual material of the poem.
We're only strays.