#1
This is my first OTS poem and my first post in here.

"Untitled"
You are my everything.
I need you.
Without you I am nothing.
Whenever I'm with you,I'm free.
You are all that matters to me.
When I hold you i never want to let go.
I love you more than anything.

I wrote this in my 1st period class this morning because I was bored
#2
pretty sure ever lined you used has been used before.

sorry.
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#3
yeah man you gotta get away from the used lines, just take the same line and think of a way to express the meaning of it differently, using symbolism or something
like, when im with you im free, just make it say something like, you are my horizon, or you unlock my cage, something representing it.

If you feel like revising it or have any other works message me
and give me your thoughts on one of mine if you feel like it
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=804005