#1
so ive got a couple parts of thing i write. i dont usually write song but just little verses and such. crit all you want.

"I'm calling out my darkest fears
Take hold of me, show me how to feel.
I‘m in good hands now, I can rest.
Through this nightmare, I’ve come out healed."


"it seems so easy to lie like you do
how can you keeps doing this to yourself?
we did the best we could. we told all we could
after all, it seems you were lying too.
Quote by MeltingWaxFace
Afterwards I said to her "Why did you blitz my asshole like that?"


#2
Quote by carbonchemicals
so ive got a couple parts of thing i write. i dont usually write song but just little verses and such. crit all you want.


"it seems so easy to lie like you do
how can you keeps doing this to yourself?
we did the best we could. we told all we could
after all, it seems you were lying too.

its honest, sounds like the same kinda structure id right in, although i dont find its taht good(mine)
so, only thing is, you should change 'we told all we could' to we told all we should'
#3
k ill do that
Quote by MeltingWaxFace
Afterwards I said to her "Why did you blitz my asshole like that?"