#1
A emotional piece in my opinion. It's no where near done but i want opinions and criticism. That's not the chord I'm gonna end on. I'm throwing as much theory as I can and keep it musical. The end is a 5/4 part and That weird chord was me playing with out of the keey chords. I'll probably just use a secondary dominant and stick with it and change the key. criticism is appreciated.

Note: I have the GP file I just cant figure out the ZIP thing so I just put Midi.
http://media.putfile.com/Acoustic-Song-21

                                                   NH                
      H        H           E  E.   E.  E.  E.  E        W                 
C ||--------------------|--0----------------------|----------------------|
G ||-----------0--------|-----1s---0--------------|--<>12----------------|
D#||-----------0--------|--------------0----------|--<>12----------------|
A#||--------------------|------------------2------|----------------------|
F ||--------------------|----------------------3--|----------------------|
C ||-----------0--------|-------------------------|-----8----------------|


   W                    E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E   
--17~----------------|-----------0--------3--0--|
--13~----------------|--------1-----------------|
---------------------|-----2-----------2--------|
---------------------|--------------------------|
---0-----------------|--------------------------|
---------------------|--1-----------3-----------|


  E  E  E  E   E   E   E    E      E   E   E  E  E  E   E  E   
-----------5-------------------|--12------10--------5s--8--0--|
--------8-------------13p--10--|------10----------------------|
-----5------------12-----------|-----------------5------------|
--------------10---------------|--------------7---------------|
--0------------0---------------|--------------0---------------|
-------------------------------|---8--------------------------|


          NH    NH                                                     
  Q       E     E  E  E  Q       W                   W                 
--3----------------7--8--0----|--0----------------|--7----------------|
--1---------------------------|--6----------------|--5----------------|
-------<>12-------------------|--5----------------|--5----------------|
-------------<>12-------------|--7----------------|--0----------------|
-------------------0----------|--0----------------|-------------------|
--0---------------------------|-------------------|-------------------|


  E  E  E  Q    E  E  E     E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E     E   E  E  Q.      E  E   
--3--------3-------------|--------------3-----0-----|--------------------3-----|
-----1----------1--------|--------1--------------1--|--3s--5--1--6~---------5--|
--------4----------4-----|-----2-----2-----2--------|--0---------5-------------|
-------------------------|--------------------------|------------0-------------|
--0----------------------|--------------------------|--0-----------------------|
----------------------3--|--1-----------------------|--------------------------|


                                   ^                                         
  H        E  E  E  E     E  E  E  Q     E  Q       E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E   
--3--------------------|--8--7-----8-----7-------|-----------0--------3--0--|
--1--------------------|--------5--5~-------5----|--------1-----------------|
--2--------------------|-----------5-------------|-----2-----------2--------|
-----------------------|-----------7-------------|--------------------------|
-----------------------|-----------0-------------|--------------------------|
--0-----------x-----x--|--5----------------------|--1-----------3-----------|


  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E     E  E  E  Q    E  E  E   
--------------0-----------|-----------1-------------|
--------1--------3--------|-----1----------1--------|
-----2--------------2-----|--------2----------------|
-----------2-----------0--|--3----------------------|
--0-----------------------|-------------------------|
--------------------------|-------------------0--1--|


            |--3--|                                     
  E  S S E  S  S  S S E  E.  S S    Q.     Q.     Q     
--------------------1-0--0---0-0-|----------------3----|
---------1--3p-1p-0-0-0--1-------|--3------5-----------|
-------0------------0-0--2-------|--4------2------2----|
-----2-------------------0-------|--5------3------3----|
--0---------2--------------------|--2------0-----------|
---------------------------------|---------------------|


    E  E  E  E  E  E  E   E     E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E   
|---------0-----------0h--1--|--1-----0-----1-----0-----|
|----------------------------|-----1-----1-----1-----1--|
|*--2-----------2------------|--------------------------|
|*-----3-----3-----3---------|--------------------------|
|----------------------------|--------------------------|
|---1------------------------|--1-----------------------|


  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E      E   E   E   Q     E   E   E   
--------8-----------8-----|--12----------12----------------|
--6-----------6--------6--|------13------------13------13--|
-----5-----5-----5--------|----------12------------12------|
--------------------------|--------------------------------|
--0-----------------------|--------------------------------|
--------------------------|---0----------------------------|


   E   E   E   Q     E   E   E       E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E   
--15----------15-----------------||--------------------------------|
------13------------13------13---||--------8-----------6-----------|
----------14------------14------*||-----------7-----------5--------|
---0----------------------------*||-----5-----------5-----------5--|
---------------------------------||--7-----------0-----------3-----|
---------------------------------||--------------------------------|


  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E     E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E   
-----------------------------0--|--------8-----------3-----------|
--------8-----------------3-----|-----------8--------------------|
-----------7--------5-----------|-----------------------5--------|
-----5-----------------2--------|-----5-----------5-----------2--|
--7--------------3--------------|--------------------------0-----|
--------------0-----------------|--0-----------3-----------------|


  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E  E     Q      E   E   E   E   E   E   E   E   
-----------------------------0--|--0~--------------------12--13--12------|
--------8-----------------3-----|--3-----------------15--------------15--|
-----------7--------5-----------|--2---------14--------------------------|
-----5-----------------2--------|--2-----14------14----------------------|
--7--------------3--------------|--3~------------------------------------|
--------------0-----------------|----------------------------------------|


  W                                     
--------------------|-----|-----|-----||
--4~----------------|-----|-----|-----||
--4-----------------|-----|-----|-----||
--4-----------------|-----|-----|-----||
--2-----------------|-----|-----|-----||
--------------------|-----|-----|-----||
Attachments:
acoustic.zip
Last edited by danilo19 at Mar 7, 2008,
#2
Very awesome and emotional piece. Maybe add some piano sometimes? Very relaxing I thought. Anyways, not much more to say, good job on that well done song.

9.5/10 Good job!

Cheers for the crit
Last edited by DarkTom666 at Mar 7, 2008,
#3
I thought this was a very nice acoustic piece. It has a certain hope feel. Witch is good, But im not one for the type of relaxing music. Gj
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#4
Very emotional. Beautiful piece. It's really soft sounding and makes me feel relaxed. I don't have any constructive criticism to give because i don't really know anything about writing this kind of melodic acoustic songs.
#5
Very nice piece, I especially liked the repeated part at bar 21. I can't really think of any crit, but maybe you could try add more bits for the piano like after bar 14. Remarkably (right word to use?) good stuff here. Well done!
#6
That was really..beautiful

and yes, you really need to change that last chord, it kind of kills it in a way.

idea. (i wouldn't be able to pull it off) but i have a feeling adding the right drum beat here and there and maybe a bass would add to the fullness of the song.

Just a suggestion.

But i really can see the emotion you put into this song.
Definately a keeper.

10/10
#7
This is a great piece i like it. I hope you don't mind but i messed about with some drums on it and liked it if you don't then its cool i just wanted something to do. I think a little bass should be added to make it fuller other than that its pretty well done
Attachments:
acoustic.zip
#9
i like but i dont think the g maj at the end fits at all well kind of a shame really but overall it was good. 8.5/10
Quote by Roc8995
I ran into some fingering issues. I can get it up to speed the way I've been fingering it, but I'm wondering if you guys have any better ideas, because it seems like there should be an easier way to finger this.


Don't worry there is Roc, there is