#1
had to change the title.

I can watch the world through a camera lens
see what I want, block all which offends
but all my stars are prayers
left with a ring round my eye and wasted years

life is danger, and danger is hope
reckless to give, but worse to keep
and what things wash off the soap
residue of thoughts in my sleep
residue of thoughts in my sleep

hope is a dangerous thing
it will coax you to the sky
then when your high and dry
it will leave you to fall

life is danger, and danger is hope
reckless to give, but worse to keep
and what things wash off the soap
residue of thoughts in my sleep
residue of thoughts in my sleep

when you only have hope left
hes already been gone for years
and those are his greatest theft
and beleif is the gold chain that he wears
i need to hear some sounds that recognize the pain in me, yeah.
#2
I can watch the world through a camera lens
see what I want, block all which offends
but all my stars are prayers
left with a ring round my eye and wasted years

I didn't get the stars part, and wasn't too fond with the "lens" and "offends" rhyme, but I loved the photography symbolism and I think you could really strengthen those lines.

life is danger, and danger is hope
reckless to give, but worse to keep
and what things wash off the soap
residue of thoughts in my sleep
residue of thoughts in my sleep

I didn't get the "danger is hope" part, but the rest makes complete sense and I think they're quite interesting points. Just thought you should re-phrase the "danger is hope" line. I also thought you should change the third line to "and what things wash off from the soap" so it would make a bit more sense.

hope is a dangerous thing
it will coax you to the sky
then when your high and dry
it will leave you to fall

There are grammar errors here, and I didn't like the half-committed rhyming or the flying/falling cliche, but the first two lines are strong. Just re-write the last two and it could be a great stanza.

when you only have hope left
hes already been gone for years
and those are his greatest theft
and beleif is the gold chain that he wears

"Those are his greatest theft" doesn't make sense grammatically. Read the over and change it up a bit...but the last line? Awesome. "Belief is the gold chain that he wears." It's completely true.

Overall I thought it was a bit half-assed but the parts I liked, I really liked. This could be pretty strong if you re-write some parts. Thanks for the crit btw!

Good luck.
#3
thanks you, the stars are the things i have in the cameras view, and i understand why you didnt get the danger is hope part, thats been one of my gripes with this.
i need to hear some sounds that recognize the pain in me, yeah.