i'd prolly say try not to deviate from the proper phrasing as much, is all i can think of.

the start was a tad lively too, just gentle arpeggio style strumming

however, it was a really good cover, great job !
Get off this damn forum and play your damn guitar.
not bad at all really, vox need some work, maybe record them seperate from the guitars so you can re do them alot until theyre perfect. Electric guitar was nice too. 7/10 not bad at all, re do the vox tho until theyre perfect.

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