#1
Well I just got done taking state tests and was bored so I decided to write a song. Just want some crit from people so please crit. and Please keep in mind i suck at writing. xD
anyways here it is


Time Goes On

The snow melts away
The sun shines bright
The leaves turn to brown
Time goes on as you just sit around

Time goes on
it doesnt wait
time goes on
it doesnt play
time goes on
it ticks away
time goes on
time goes on

live everyday like its your last
take some risks now and then
otherwise you will always wonder
about everything you could have been

Time goes on
it doesnt wait
time goes on
it doesnt play
time goes on
it ticks away
time goes on
time goes on

Time waits for no one
your clock's not set for long
so get out and do something
because time just goes on

Time goes on
it doesnt wait
time goes on
it doesnt play
time goes on
it ticks away
time goes on
time goes on


like i said... not that great but ya. =p
#2
sorry mate.. hate to say this.. but you need to change your title.. im not going to report it but someone else will... so do otherwise this will get closed... sucks i know

seems like a cool song... simple but seems like it could be affective.. :-)
Light touch my hand, in a dream of Golden Skans, from now on.
You can forget our future plans.