#1
please crit this work... I got some inspiration from Joe Satriani's ten words, and wrote with that song in mind, using whatever words popped into my head and whatever feelings I got while listening, when I make an instrumental it will have a similar beat, but other than that be entirely unique... obviously I can't legally steal it haha

anyway without further adeu

Well Tommorrow may be bleeding,
but the day will always come,
and then I must be leaving you
for once and for all.

No matter where it takes me, how far, how wide
it's the path that I must go
forever and ever I'll keep movin' on.

But I'll never forget you and all
the things that you have done.
Maybe we fought or fell in love,
it matters in my heart alone

For better or worse, its the way things were,
and the way they'll always be
forever and ever I'll keep movin' on.

altered lyric/solo thing... a little more passionate and violent

This past that chains me down,
these labels that bring me to the ground,
I'll fight them forever and a day, oh I'll
keep goin' til' the end, no matter what you may say...

I am me -- and thats all I am -- if you dont like it, then I just don't care.

altered lyric/solo thing done

Well Tommorrow may be bleeding,
but the day will always come,
and then I must be leaving you
for once and for all.

No matter where it takes me, how far, how wide
it's the path that I must go
forever and ever I'll keep movin' on.
Gear:

Jackson dk2m
MIM strat
peavey jsx 2x12 combo
Recording King RDC-26
Digitch RP1000
Crybaby 535Q
#2
tomorrow is spelled with one 'm'.

i'll probably crit it all later
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Motion City Soundtrack, Get Up Kids, Jimmy Eat World, Transit, Brand New, Dashboard Confessional, Early November, Fall Out Boy, Jawbreaker, Polar Bear Club, The Story So Far, the Wonder Years, Something Corporate.
#3
yeah sorry for the misspelling, if its any excuse I posted it at like 3 AM without sleep lol...

it won't see use in my band now because we've decided on moving to a metal genre instead of soft/hard rock, which is slightly disappointing, but we have some other good stuff in the works...
Gear:

Jackson dk2m
MIM strat
peavey jsx 2x12 combo
Recording King RDC-26
Digitch RP1000
Crybaby 535Q