#2
Is the guitar slightly out of tune? Anyways.

Your voice sounds " vulnerable" and the lyrics reminded me of a friend.
I must admit theres a like able quality to your voice. It's not amazing but it seems to fit very well. You could have spiced up the song with maybe a second guitar picking your chords. Some shakers, some synth. Something to pick it up. The harmonica was a nice touch. This reminds me of Neil Hannons A lady of a certain age. And some radiohead stuff. Anyways good stuff add some more melodies and keep rocking.

Mind critting mine?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=806672

I'll add you us singer/ songwriters should keep in touch.
Smile alot today... okay?
#3
i'll crit this later today.
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#5
i like it dude. the guitar sounds out of tune, or at least really highpitched. i like your voice though, good song.

6.5/10
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#6
I really like the tone of your voice...it's got its own unique vibe. I agree with Sumthing Catchy...I think some extra additions could really bring this to life. Great vocals, and its a solid base for a song. I was impressed, it's sort of haunting. Thanks for the comment on mine.