#1
This was my attempt at writing a pop-punk song. I feel like it needs something. Anyone wanna help out?

I know you and I aren't the greatest friends

You know I sold out to the latest trend.

I wish I could say It better suits my voice

But in this world It's just the better choice

Selling Out to the Latest Trend

It's Just buisiness my friend

Really now can you blame me?

Cuz, you know this world ain't cheap

Hoping now with this choice I'll see a glimpse of fame

Worrying that my idea was a big mistake

Sold out to the trends just to be a star

Praying that I'll go far...

I wish I could say It better suits my voice

But in this world It's just the better choice

Selling Out to the Latest Trend

It's Just buisiness my friend

I wish I could say It better suits my voice

But in this world It's just the better choice

Selling Out to the Latest Trend

It's Just buisiness my friend
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A "tubescreamer" is a person paid by a guitarist to stand behind the amp and scream at the tubes. This terrifies the tubes into overdriving and delivers a thick, harmonic-rich tone.
#2
this is an old semipunk saying this, cut out the I and you. You've got the right idea and are going the right way, but I an U has been done to death in punk, you'll get much more respect if you say the exact same thing to a chacter..... weird I know... but there must be someone who spond that feeling.... give that a name and sing of him!!! hope that help!!


you have done a good job though!!! keep the world infront of u
Out here you've gotta know where your towel is!
#3
alright thanks
and its a her btw
Quote by barden1069
A "tubescreamer" is a person paid by a guitarist to stand behind the amp and scream at the tubes. This terrifies the tubes into overdriving and delivers a thick, harmonic-rich tone.
#4
even better!!! punk is more for the women these days..... they are lumped into catagories and need to break out!!!!
Out here you've gotta know where your towel is!
#5
after thought... be less critical with your words,.... or be way more critical with larger words!!!
Out here you've gotta know where your towel is!