#3
Sounded nice, but what was that weird change at 30 seconds or so? I think I like the second half better, sounded catchy and melodic.

A bass part would add another nice layer to this, see if you can get a bass friend to lay a part down for you.

Sounds cool, C4C?

http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=808775
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#6
great clean tone and layering here at the start. a couple of notes sound a bit off beat.
nice melody part. i like your work with delay on the second part. i agree with morgan, i like this part more, a tighter sound and bouncy feel.
things to work on? well, write more of it, the song cuts off, figure out a better way to transition the two parts. practise the melody on the first half more working on timing especially. a few notes sounded like you forgot little parts of it and remembered them at the last moment. otherwise, its a great song idea.

crit my stuff? links are below in my sig. feel free to check out any of them, Blueberry is probably more your style though. Thanks!
Last edited by diablo_man at Mar 13, 2008,
#8
i love the effects etc u use at the beginning and the guitars over laid each other, but as others said there is a wierd change thing where theres a gap which you should really edit out, the second half gets a little boring but i think drums, bass and maybe singing would improve it, the first half is better IMO, i can imagine a vocal line over the top of it though and it would sound gd, keep up the gd work, i also liek your breath song

could you crit mine please http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=808371

thnx
#9
the song is actually 2 songs put together from different time periods so I didnt really put them together.