#1
Ok, I'm not sure if this is easy enough to follow...or if it makes enough sense to anyone else other than me..it's very "multiple peronailty-ish" (yeah I know that's not a word) AND self contradictory


Blood burnt to ashes
Ghastly hollow inside
Falling further into decent
Falling further down

But I'll keep walking thru
The depths of despair
Turning to concrete
Forever here I'll remain

I'm not your martyr
I will not beg for your empathy
I ask for nothing
In the wake of my annihilation

Blood burnt to ashes
Crumbling inside
Ghastly hollow
Struggling to rise
Struggling to rise

But I'll keep walking through
The depths of despair
Turning to concrete
Forever here I'll remain

I'm not your martyr
I will not beg for your empathy
I ask for nothing
In the wake of my annihilation

And forever here I'll remain
To stand in the shadow of what used to be me.
#2
I liked this, the wording is good and some parts were quite powerful and the ending is also very good.