#1
You can listen to the song here:
http://www.myspace.com/thedefinitiveedition

second one down "omega 3 and apathy"
crit for crit and so forth

most of us are dieting and most of us are drunk
and the in betweens have sordid dreams that would embarress anyone
lifetimes kicking habits and scorning those who dont
so busy finding answers we forgot what the question was

this picturesque, self obsessed display
is so fake that its inevitably frayed

woah I've had enough of this
and they say that ignorance is bliss
theyre so quick to resist, so quick to dismiss
anything that fails to commit
to this

omega 3 and apathy are added to the feed
smoking kills and excess thrills are banned from our tvs
so insecure so damn unsure of what we really need
we idolize, sensationalize half arsed celebrities

people spend and take and lose and nothing's ever gained
public speakers/life-long drinkers find someone else to blame

woah I've had enough of this
and they say that ignorance is bliss
theyre so quick to resist, to dismiss
anything that fails to commit
to this
“I smoke. If this bothers anyone, I suggest you look around at the world in which we live and shut your f*ckin' mouth.” RIP
Http://www.Smash-it-up.tk
#2
I dig social commentary that rhymes.

I dig this.

I'll com eback and crit it later if I find anything else to say.
#3
lyrically, this is strong in the sense that it feels... like it's not missing anything. It feels kind of complete, I guess.

There are a few lines I don't really love, but they kind of seem to always appear and I guess give you some element of personal style so they should stay,

I loved

"lifetimes kicking habbits and scorning those who don't/.."

You come out with some great one-liners.

Sorry I couldn't offer any real constructive criticism - I really liked this.