#1
here's a song me n my friend rosie wrote..... so..... tell me what u think of it... It's not completely finished but....

Losing Sense

Shadows cross my mind
Pulling me to the darkness
The Angels, taking me now to heaven
Oh Lord, I’m loosing sense

Christ, your sacrifice in vain
The world is as it was before
No more can I survive this tantalising threat
Of discrimination and war

Shadows cross my mind
Pulling me to the dark
The Angels, taking me now to heaven
Oh Lord I’m loosing sense

espirita sancte
Faith within still burns strong
Holy Spirit
Let the world be taught to love again

Shadows Cross my mind
Pulling me to the Dark
The Angels, taking me now to heaven
Oh Lord, I’m loosing sense
Last edited by winter_tears at Mar 13, 2008,
#3
hey I really liked this, but just to let you know the latin you put into it is backwards. It is actually espirita sancte. besides that I liked this. In the first stanza the first to lines are really cliche.

take a look at mine if you get the chance.
link is in sig