#1
poppin pills
till i get ill
call up asdas
'i cant work da tills'
i feel ill
woaah
calm down
deep breath
stomach pump
no need to invest
i get it all on
the nhs
thats y england
is the best
for healthcare treatments
unless
ur not keen on waiting
in the waiting list
endlessly waiting
til christmas
just to get yourself
a new hip
when u tripped last august
so your still stressed
and ur daughters not
impressed
but its not in their best
interest
to look after u
and address
the current situation
unless
u r currently dying
'look at this'
'u might b dying'
'no s***'
'we're gonna hav to hurry'
'if u insist'
'nurse, save my curry. put it in the fridge'
'you kiddin me?! f*** this, where those 'prescription' pills..im outta here'
Last edited by 12eTa1217e17 at Mar 14, 2008,
#3
Not bad, I like the flow of this. I feel like this should be longer to be honest and the grammar Nazis will eat you alive for this. Other than that, good work, keep it up and try to close it up better I think .
#5
Right now where do i start on the grammar... errrr, well, ahh **** it its readable...lol

i liked it.. it has a kinda hadouken feel to it i thought... :-)
Light touch my hand, in a dream of Golden Skans, from now on.
You can forget our future plans.
#6
Quote by Gizmo69
i liked it.. it has a kinda hadouken feel to it i thought... :-)


The noise they make on street fighter when they fire a blue power ball at you ? :-\
#7
Quote by R_U_READY?
The noise they make on street fighter when they fire a blue power ball at you ? :-\


I believe he was referring to the band.
#8
never heard of haddouken.. might check it out, to see if it is really a complement or not! :P
#9
Quote by 12eTa1217e17
never heard of haddouken.. might check it out, to see if it is really a complement or not! :P

There a cool band.. they write about life stuff.. one song which is cool and i was partly reffering to is Liquid lives... it was a complement i like the band.. haha
Light touch my hand, in a dream of Golden Skans, from now on.
You can forget our future plans.