#1
Take me away to the darkness
Take me out of this sad mind
Let the madness rein while my crazy eyes cry
Let me fly on life
I could care if I die

Darkness rage over my soul tonight
Drive me insane
Get me through the pain
Release this rage from my mind

Let the love come tame me
As I know it will
Feel the night around us
Let your hart take flight
Shine tonight wile the darkness lasts


It might be weak or crapy. IDK. I haven't worked with it much. I wrote it quickly. I was in an angry mood so I dicided to write. when I was in the middle of it I wanted to change in into more of a love sort of song. so yeah it probibaly sounds like its about sex. wich to me is sensable being that thats something I can have good fellings and ill angry feeling tward.
#2
thats pretty cool dude. im not much of a songwriter/critic, but it does sound cool..
the love bit at the end kinda threw me off but it was cool
disasterpiece
#3
... thats good! Can you tell me how to write your own songs because I don´t have good ideas for songs... maybe you can tell me! ^^
#4
looking at it now that can be a bit of a throw off. I was changing gears a bit at that part of the song.

as far as writing. try to catch yourself when a feeling is bubbling inside you. anger saddness exet... get some paper (or type) and start writing. don't erase don't look back just keep writing and see what happens.
#5
This is good....I liked the way it changes at the end though themiddle doesn't seem to flow as well as teh beginning and end
#7
man this is pretty good, like i said to the other guys lyrics i commented. I just try and jam to peoples lyrics ahaha and yours came out pretty good aswell, came out as one of those songs where the gutars hit a chord hold it and the guy sings, pretty good lyrics. And as for Greg i like the " Drive me Insane" bit. Good stuff, maybe check out my lyrics.

" Slipping Away "
#8
thats cool. I usualy try to look for weak lines. " Drive me Insane" just seemed original to me. maybe it should stay. I'll think on it.