#1
Yesterday I forced myself to record one of the songs i've been working on for the past week or so. I wrote a poem for the song a few weeks ago then translted it into a guitar song. Its about winning and losing games. To me its about losing chess but i suppose it just strikes a chord more so with the after feeling of loss.

Let me know what you think? c4c
When the sun falls the moon rises...

My attempt at art lasted for an instant and then faded like a candle without oil...

When i get around to making more candles hopefully my art will return in a perfect form that all can appreciate.
#3
this is a cool tune man.. well done.. I like it. It has emotion in it. Crit mine please? On my profile called Second Song Idea (some riffs I might turn into a song this summer)


Thanks
#4
i like it, but it feels kind of rough at points. clean up your playing (in the first half is where the problems seemed to be) and i think it'd be really awesome.

7/10

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#5
Quote by DiveRightIn63
i like it, but it feels kind of rough at points. clean up your playing (in the first half is where the problems seemed to be) and i think it'd be really awesome.

7/10

C4C? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=809630


I like this one.. a harsh critiquer, I will gladly crit your.
When the sun falls the moon rises...

My attempt at art lasted for an instant and then faded like a candle without oil...

When i get around to making more candles hopefully my art will return in a perfect form that all can appreciate.
#6
there r a couple places its sloppy but not to bad really. i like it alot, very cool sounds. it gives a really soothing vibe. u can tell there is alot emotion in the songwriting. i love the lead acoustic, sounds great. keep it up.

could u crit mine
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=808224
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