#1
Okay, here's a song I wrote for a special someone here recently. Not my best lyrically but I like it non-the-less. I've got an mp3 up on my MySpace .
Any thoughts???

When I’m With You
By Aaron Zimmerman
Copyright 2008

There’s no way to explain
The Way I feel, when I’m with you
It’s like being caught in the rain
And just strolling on through

Yeah, Whoa
It’s such a beautiful feeling
When I’m with you

Driving around on a Friday night
Your sitting right there next to me
Yeah, everything feels alright
As long as you’re in the passenger’s seat

Yeah, Whoa
It’s such a beautiful feeling
When I’m with you

Oh, when I hold you in my arms
And you’re looking into my eyes
I know that I can do no wrong
When you hold me this tight
Whoa, Yeah
Oh, it’s such a beautiful feeling
When I’m with you

Yeah, we could just talk for hours
Bout what’s on our minds
All life’s sweet and sours
On until the end of time

Yeah, Whoa

Cause, when I hold you in my arms
And you’re looking into my eyes
I know that I can do no wrong
When you hold me this tight
Whoa, Yeah
It’s such a beautiful feeling
When I’m with you

Such a beautiful feeling
When I'm with you

Oh, such a beautiful ,wonderful feeling
When I’m with you

When I’m with you
When I'm with you
Oh, when I’m with… you
Last edited by azmuzik at Mar 15, 2008,
#2
awwwh! that is sooo cute!
inspired by anyone in particular?
Quote by DistantScreams
Awwwww.... CaptainBec that was messed up


Why? Because I rap about reality? Like me and my grandma having a cup of tea?
There ain't no party like my nanna's tea party - heey - ho!
#3
I like it.. but I noticed you put "diving around on a friday night" when you meant "driving"

Not a big thing obviously, but your spelt it that way on your myspace too, so you may want to correct it there.

Anyway, good work, keep it up.
Tonight..lets leave the world behind..

Jessyka + Casey = <3

The Gear:
Guitar: FENDER SQUIER M-80
Bass: Samick
#4
Yeah, thanks.
I guess thats the problem with copy and paste....

It's for my gf btw.
#5
lmafo that is the funniest thing ive ever heard. i dont think there was a line in that entire song that wasnt just a cliched peice of s**t. i mean seriously its like being caught in the rain gee.... how did you think of that.
btw did your gf dump you when she read this 'song' if you call it that.
#6
ha ha... oh yeah, funny guy

so obviously this isn't your type of music, there is no use tearing it down bud...
cliche is not bad though you know...
It doesn't hurt to be a little cliche once in a while

And being as I wrote this for her
And she loved it,
It did its job...

I'm not trying to be some superstar songwriter, its not going to happen.
So why don't you give me a break bud.
#7
Quote by azmuzik
And being as I wrote this for her
And she loved it,
It did its job...
I guess if it served its purpose, then great.. But to be honest with you, it's really not that exciting of a song.
#8
Hey,
Nice song buddy. Azzanator couldnt do any better dont listen to him.
i hope you got lucky mate naughty naughty