#1
I recorded a section of a song last night at about 2AM and put it on youtube and figured, whats the best place to come get critiques (And shamless "UG FOREVAAAAR" posts on youtube) Than here.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zbONeYfLQCk
Tell me what you think.
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You make me feel
Like a dog, you can see, my emotions
Is this for real, i'm a man
Sinking deep, in the ocean
#2
There were some spots I thought you were going to run with the vocals... but you kept a pretty even keel all the way through.

In the line "I'm missing you so much more today" You could've shot up to a higher note on the word "you" and held it just a little bit to give the vocals some dynamic. Sorry I don't know the note, but I can hear it in my head.

Cool song, keep working on it!

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