#1
You pray for this nightmare to end
when you see me coming around the bend
Your **** talking got you nowhere
and I'm willing to take it there
walking around always paranoid
These nights you spend so lonely

Oh how the mighty have fallen
nothing more than a memory forgotten
Mcarthy cant help you now
Was he really anyhow

Look at us now (Drowning in the world you left behind)
Standing here alone (Where did you go)
Hang your head in fear (The time is near)
I Dont Want To Wait Another Day


I'm tired of this life i'm living
I wont be consumed by fear
No longer will I let you live my life
Let us not be decieved
We are in the midst of a cold war


Oh how the mighty have fallen
nothing more than a memory forgotten
Mcarthy cant help you now
Was he really anyhow

Look at us now (Drowning in the world you left behind)
Standing here alone (Where did you go)
Hang your head in fear (The time is near)
I...Dont....Want....To .....Wait .....Another......Day


Tear down this wall
Will It ever fall
You will no longer strike fear in me
and this is where it ends


Oh how the mighty have fallen
nothing more than a memory forgotten
Mcarthy cant help you now
Was he really anyhow


Look at us now (Drowning in the world you left behind)
Standing here alone (Where did you go)
Hang your head in fear (The time is near)
I Dont Want To Wait Another Day

This is the first song I have written and it is about the Cold War
Last edited by BigChief84 at Mar 18, 2008,
#2
it felt like avenged sevenfold meats Guns and roses.. im not sure i like that... but overall it seems quite good, some slightly cliche parts but apart from that. cool...:-)
#3
Good idea for a song.
Though its very loosely structured.

Its seems to be lacking something. Probably emotions and strength. Which i think is cause of a slight excessive repetition of the same ideas throughout the song.
But well, its still pretty good if its just your first song.
Just you've gotta keep the lyrics and structure tight for a song (by keeping a check on the syllable count).
#4
I like the overall feel.
There are some places where I think you could have used better words. For example "drowning in the world you left behind" is cliche simply because of the word "drowning".
I'd love to see more obvious references to the Cold War.
Especially on the "tear this wall line", I thought it'd be sweet to use Reagan's "Mr. Gorbachev, tear down this wall!" quote, but that might mean having to tweak your beat count for that small piece. But yeah, anyway, I think more references would make it a more concrete song. As it is it's good, but not altogether exceptional.