#1
I had some fun making this. Just started but lost it, maybe itll come back tomorrow. So i guess ill finish it in a bit but for now here it is. crit4crit

-Updated friday march 21, 2008
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Last edited by Jonathan Trejo at Mar 21, 2008,
#2
intros a bit fast don't you think...

sounds better at 1/2 speed
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#3
sorry if im alittle fast on the intro but. It does sound better fast for my taste I wanna keep the listener entertained lol not bored with freakishly slow beats
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#4
Just to clairify man, i dont listen to any metalcore. the closest to metalcore i get is Lamb of God. A personally i dont think my song is metalcore. but i'll admit it has afew riffs that could be called metalcore. Right now for ur song. I listened to it earlyer and was going to comment but never got round to it. but C4C. its only fair.

Pros:
Very chaotic, (i love that)
It was interesting in the sense that its all over the place (sound sililar to chatioc but i know what i mean)

Cons:
The drums, i hated everything about them.
The rythym guitar wasnt my thing
#5
The intro riff is kinda cool. But the rythm guitar and lead guitar don't match at all. It's actually petty confusing.

The chorus sounds good at first. But 3 chord phrasing in 4/4 time = Bad. You should have a four chord progression for the chorus. I also don't really like the seeminly random lead played over it.

So yeah, so far, I don't really like this. I give it 5/10 but I'm sure you can ouch it up and then it will be better.
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#6
if sum one cud play this piece. I would be amazed also happy cause its abit hard for me at the speed. So ill probably post a recording soon. Hopefully someone beats me too it!. btw thnx for the crits
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