#1
Hello there my crush, hello there
My heart was filled by you
Everytime I saw u, I smiled
Even my mouth can laugh

I always wanted to see you
Cause I liked you so much
I really didn't know how
I can fall in love with you

Cho:
But every time, you weren't around me
I couldn't even shape a smile
Cause I missed you
I hoped to see you
Everyday
So my heart will not feel empty
Cause I liked you so much

Bridge:
But, what I can do
You are just my crush
I didn't know, If you liked me or not
It was hard to confess
My love to you
And I liked you so much..
Last edited by michie_ojie at May 2, 2009,
#4
since english isnt my first language,i did some grammatical error. can sum1 correct those for me? XD
#7
thx for the comments and yeah i realize it too. mouth can laugh n mouth cannot smiling,.what words are the best to change them?
#8
mouth connot smiling can be changed to I couldn't even smile and mouth can laugh to I even started to laugh (best ideas i could come up with so they probably aren't very good )
#9
Grammar issues, to be honest.
A possible correction (changes in bold:
Hello there my crush, hello there
My heart is filled byyou
Every time I see you, I smile
Even my soul can laugh (Bad substitution here, couldn't think of anything better)

I always wanted to see you
Cause I like you so much
I really don't know how
I can fall in love with you

Cho:
But everytime, I was without you
My mouth couldn't even smile
Cause I miss you
I hope to see you
Everyday
So my heart will not feel empty
Cause I like you so much

Bridge:
But what I can do
You are just my crush
I dont know, If you like me or not
Its hard to confess
My love to you
And I like you so much..


I like you so much
From the chorus/bridge
This feels somewhat depthless to me, I'd change it to "I need you too much" or similar.

You are just my crush

Just? If you want to show emotion, that's one word you don't want in there. =P

Also, it feels (to a degree) without direction to me, but that's just my taste in lyrics. I like them to tell a story.
#10
Wow a very much thanks to ur guys help.i'll try to make something better in my lyrics ;D and yeah I hope i can make it good and try to think any other words that are more power hehe. thx again