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Its a song I wrote, started out as just one of my old poems, iv written loads over the years, so I put this to some chords. Tell me what you think, or comment on the video.
The lyrics basically go:

Serenading her in coke,
An' all the dreams she spoke,
Kissed them all away,
In bliss for a day.
Blind to the world,
Cares of hopes are dulled.

She's to far gone,
To know where there comin' from.
To young to grow old,
For life to unfold.

Losing sleep at night,
Consiousness is a fight,
As the fun slips away,
And all the words she could say.

Now that shes gone,
Then comes the break of dawn,
Left only insight,
To her a Goodnight.