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So, I wrote this song a few months ago and I recently dug it up and dusted it off a bit. It's not my absolute best work, but I'd like it to be, and I can't help trying to make it better. That's where you come it. Crit is welcome, or just tell me what you think. :]


Kick-Start Circulation


Verse I:
There are no more reasons
And i've run out of excuses
I'll rip you at the half, if I can't push it through


Marching, rushing over
Made me feel, glad all over


Chorus:
Come clean when given the chance
I'm going to get what's been coming all along
Back to lonely square one, I'm all alone with my conscience
Oh, I know it's on (it's on)


Verse II:
There were many excursions
On which we had our fun
I was with you on the ave-en-ue


Marching, rushing over
Made me feel, glad all over


Chorus:
Come clean when given the chance
I'm going to get what's been coming all along
Back to lonely square one, I'm all alone with my conscience
Oh, I know it's on (it's on)


Interlude: x2
I stopped taking your calls, because you were wrong
I stopped taking your calls, kick-start circulation, oh

Chorus x2

Repeat the Interlude to fade-out


So, how was it?
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