Not bad, I like it. Well played and in time.
My only criticism is that the palm mutes could be a little tighter perhaps, it sounds to me like their lagging slightly behind the beat.
The solo Was cool

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the intro wasnt right, the pattern you used wasn't correct, but the rest sounded good
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