#1
Good moments we have together
that feeling is a pretty ok one
its also a unsure one
I ask if were gonna stay together this time
how long do I have left feeling wanted, needed, important and
content with still Breathing

our future is on a finger tip swaying to a final result

your clueless unsure face instantly grows big
i feel broken forever always just like always
just like when i first set my eyes on you
i pray this problem works out
maybe this is your problem?

its like we haven't talked in 3-6 months
its all my fault or partly my fault
or something with yourself isnt right
please tell me the truth already
anyone good lives life honestly

our future is on a finger tip swaying to a final result

your clueless unsure face instantly grows big
i feel broken forever always just like always
just like when i first set my eyes on you
i pray this problem works out
maybe this is your problem?

it destroys me it cuts us to shreds
were just like everyone else after all
and more unsure then we've ever been before
we realize to late everytime how much are nothing means
#2
Ok, that was pretty decent. But it depends on whether you want this to just be a poem, or a song. As a song, you have virtually no rhyme scheme, which is ok, I've seen other artists do this and have perfectly good songs.

The ironic thing is I happen to have a situation at school with a girl that you almost perfectly described. haha nice going.

Some of you lines feel short like:

"Good moments we have together
that feeling is a pretty ok one
its also a unsure one

maybe you could combine the two lines about how the feelings you have are good but unsure at the same time and it might fit better that way.

I ask if were gonna stay together this time
how long do I have left feeling wanted, needed, important and
content with still Breathing"
[ try to replace 'with' with while, maybe that might work better for you.

just a few quick suggestions... I guess I would really have to hear it to music to get a good feel for how you could improve on it.

Thanks for posting your lyrics,
The Magickan