#1
This is a song my cousin wrote. It sounds a little choppy, so any help to improve it would be great.

Pre- Chorus:

The Sun goes down
And Sky turns black
As Satan Rises To Rule This World

Verse 1

Fear The Dark Lord
For he is here
Light your faith into flames
And Pull out your gear
Shoot the bastards into dust
As each victim drops endlessly to Hell.

Chorus:

The Sun goes down
And the Sky goes black
As Satan Rises To rule This World
The Sun goes down
And Sky turns black
It’s the night of the Antichrist
Now bow down as you die.

-solo: Jeff -


Chorus2:

You will scream in agony, as he tears through your skin
and you will scream, when he sucks out your brain through a straw
and you will scream, as your life starts to fade away
And you’ll scream, cause in hell your frozen heart will thaw!

Chorus:

The Sun goes down
And the Sky goes black
As Satan Rises To rule This World
The Sun goes down
And Sky turns black
It’s the night of the Antichrist
Now bow down as you die.


**** !


Thanks.
#2
turn 'The Sun goes down' to 'The Sun descends'...'As Satin Rises to rule This World' to ' As Satin ascends to curse this Earth'
#4
also...'And the Sky turns black' to 'the Heavens dim' So the chorus goes (in my head)

The Sun descends
The Heavens dim
As Satan ascends to curse this Earth
Last edited by domino_92 at Mar 23, 2008,
#6
Ok. Thanks.
It's my first song for a new band we've made, so we're just getting started.
And yeah, it is going to be a little ( or a lot ) dark, cause we're gearing towards a Black/Death metal band with influences of other genres we enjoy. Basically Progressive Death/Black.
#7
Quote by Morbid_Angel_93
Ok. Thanks.
It's my first song for a new band we've made, so we're just getting started.
And yeah, it is going to be a little ( or a lot ) dark, cause we're gearing towards a Black/Death metal band with influences of other genres we enjoy. Basically Progressive Death/Black.


nice, i hope you guys get off to a good start...good song