#1
is there a side brighter?
one luminescent,
perhaps disobliged by a rotating earth?

"i'd like to point out that honey is nothing but bee-vomit."

continuamos,
advertise your heart
through songs,
hide behind those shadows and words.

"dreams of the future are nothing but dreams of the future."

let's dwell on the past and what we never had,
on the extension cord your father beat you with and
the mother who turned her head.
but remember, we were born void of precepts.

"Hell would be a goddamn promotion."

everything in this town is corroded;
the buildings and the streets are starved,
and even the people are all chipping like paint.
in the coffee shop, i swear to god,
i thought i saw the same old man walk in three times,
and in a way, i was right.
Last edited by Arthur Curry at Mar 24, 2008,
#2
Fucking incredible.

Your last couple of pieces fell on my idle head, but this was so good.

"Dreams of the future are nothing but dreams of the future."

You have no idea how bitter that is, and I love you for it.
Poor advice.
#3
This is very interesting. Love the stuff in the quotes, man. Is it fair to make me feel like my very existence is just a mere leaf in autumn. Thats what this piece did, I really felt this a lot. And I hardly get that from most of the stuff I read here these days. Everything in this piece is easy to connect to. And the ending, if that is the ending, was so gloomy, so dark, especially the last two lines. I really liked that part. Good write.

P.S. I think you should move....ha keep up the work, I look forward to reading more from you.
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#5
Quote by Arthur Curry
let's dwell on the past and what we never had,
on the extension cord your father beat you with and
the mother who turned her head.


That's the best line for me. This is nice.
turn me back into the pet that i was when we met,
i was happier then with no mind-set.
#7

I did. I think. Oh wait. perhaps I did, and just didn't say I did.

secret bump




love is a dog from hell.