#1


unfortunately i need to go off the rails
smash myself up
to the sound of fleetwood mac's "dreams"
and there's nothing i can do about it -
two girls i don't know just left my home
in a taxi with a man they didn't know
and he has a wife
that he probably doesn't know either.
so when no one really knows themselves
how can they all walk in
say hi
say how are you?
lie to my face and grin and expect
to hear that bass
before she comes in
in all her glory
Stevie Nicks
godess.
you see
women
they will come and go
as they please
it sometimes seems
but they can all walk in and i'll be here
beer or wine or rum or whisky
and i won't say a word
until that that bass and those chords and that voice
have spoken for me.





love is a dog from hell.



#2
This was another nice read. Love your stuff. It's so, I dunno, downtrodden and it knows it.

No suggestions, but it was pretty in a unique way.
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#4
so when no one really knows themselves
how can they all walk in
say hi
say how are you?


My favourite part.

It's very good, even though I hate Fleetwood Mac and Stevie Nicks, that didn't get in the way of me enjoying it The ending is also very good, and your line breaks work well, and actually help the piece flow better rather than hinder it like a lot of times they do when they aren't properly used. Wow that was a wordy sentence. Thanks for the input on mine, keep up the good stuff.