#1
Hey guys, I finally got my first song written, if you could check it out on my profile and give me some suggestions or critiques so I can make it better it would be awesome.

http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/tr3nt/

Thanks yo

Edit; It's being played through guitar pro.
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Last edited by tr3nt at Mar 24, 2008,
#2
anyone?
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#3
I like it.
Sounds like you were going for a pop punkish feel.
#5
Thanks guys!
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#6
I thought it was really good for your first song it would be better if it was better quality but it is still good. Could you crit mine in my profile or on my myspace. myspace.com/allornothing
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#7
Hey man,

I definitely dug it. With this type of music theres a huge difference between having it played through a MIDI machine, and the actual guitar amp. You're main theme is pretty cool, but it can only really be listened to so many times without hearing some sort of melody over top of it, or else it gets monotonous. I was going to tell you to write a different riff at around the 2:12 marker, but it ended up coming in at around 2:20, which I was pleased with.

There's one part of the tune, though I forgot where, which makes very nice use of dissonances. These tend to sound better on programs like Guitar Pro however, and you may find yourself cringing at those dissonances on an instrument that actually has temperment. What I'm trying to say is when you play it, play in tune, as if that didn't apply to everything ever.

Crit me as well, please. https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=819544
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#8
^ I like ! Really really cool !
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