#1
this is my band A Call from Aboves new song. It has a avenged sevenfoldesqe sound to it. why are you stepping into my life isn't it it clear its suicide. your invading my privacy why can't you just leave me in piece. Isn't it so obvious you brought out the evil in me. It's my life, it's my life so don't waste my precious time. It's my life, it's my life so blind you can't see. You lying mother@#$%ers are in my security. all you do is stand watch and follow me. Watch and learn honey, so you can finally plead. I'm sorry you can't stand, but soon you'll be buried with me. Chorus repeats. Is it okay, is it okay, if I can stay. Oh will you hear, oh will you hearme cry! Guitar solo and then a keyboard solo. chorus repeats. Pleaze respond
#2
dude.... its really really really hard to read
simply because its not written in stanzas.

lyrically its ok, almost cliche. but pretty good
how old are you?? just curiosity
your lyrics seem young
i don't mean to offend you if are older
it just seems that way
The problem with rock music is there are to many people that play the guitar... and not enough guitarist. Guitar Hero Doesnt help...
#3
1. Put it in stanzas. Then I will crit it.
2. It's My Life is a song by Bon Jovi
3. Ummmm..... I don't know what to say, but lists always look better with a #3.
#5
Quote by #1 synth
hey hey you you I dont like your girlfriend?

You should get a new one?
#6
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how old are you?? just curiosity
your lyrics seem young
i don't mean to offend you if are older
it just seems that way

I am 13