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Ok so I just signed up today... and this is my first post.
I have been writing lyrics as long as i can remember but am starting to feel like I am getting a bit stagnant. they all seem to have the same feel and theme. anyhow here is one for critique. Just wanted a little feedback. Greatly Appreciated!

"Tell Me"

So tell me?

Did you say?

never, never, never, ever.

Did you say you saw the doctor?
Did you say he made you well?
I know there's something in your chest that's painful
But honey, this is my living hell.

Cuz i can never, never go back.
And change the facts
No, I can never, never turn around
and make you love me more.

And did you ever, ever want to?
Did you ever, ever need to?
Did you ever, ever want to need me?
Did you ever, ever want to please me?
Cuz I know, you never did either...
so tell me

I don't know any more then you do
so tell me.

Pink sky's introduce the night.
But I think you should introduce yourself
Cuz I ain't got time to fly
and you know why

Did you say
did you say you love me
so tell me

Cuz i can never, never go back.
And change the facts
No, I can never, never turn around
and make you love me more.

Did you ever, ever want to need me?
Did you ever, ever want to please me?
cuz I dont know any more then you do

so tell me
Did you say
did you say you love me?
so tell me

Is this another chance? The sky is blue.
Is this another chance, to fly away with you?

Cuz i can never, never go back.
And change the facts
I can never, never turn around
and make you love me more.

so tell me, I don't know any more then you do
Did you say, did you say, did you say, did you say you love me?
never. never. never.
#2
that was really good. Those words express exactly how im feeling right now about my relationship with my girl. Good job, man, good job. Your great. Keep it up.

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace." - Jimi Hendrix