#1
First song, tell me what to improve

Please sing me to sleep
Make me forget
The things that I have done
The love that has begun

Lets not remember
Let it turn to dust
And in a single gust
It will go away, go away

Make me forget
The beauty of her
The way she made me feel
Yea, it's a wonderful

Lets not remember
Let it turn to dust
And in a single gust
It will go away, go away

Her hair, her eyes
Remind me of the highs
Goodbyes
The goodbye

Will I be able to
Forget the way I felt
When I was with her?

No
Never gonna forget you...
Ever

Please sing me to sleep
Don't let me forget
The things we've done
The love...
That's just begun

Her hair, her eyes
Remind me of the highs
Goodbyes
Goodbye....
#2
Not bad for a first try!

My complaint? Personally, I'm rather detracted from the subject matter of the song since there's really nothing unique or special about it.
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#3
not bad for a first.

i really have no complaints.
except this;


The things that I have [done]
The love that has [begun]

something about one of those last two words takes the flow
out.
find a replacement, or if you already have the way you're
going to sing it, or whatever, and it sounds right, leave it.