#1
This is my very first song I put together in about five minutes. Opinions would be terrific, just don't be too harsh

You know its right
And it can't be wrong
All I see
Is the apparent me
Thats not all
You see in me

Its easy to do
With your eyes like that
but now I fell into the trap
With the mind confused
and the heart so sore
It couldn't be done
only us as yours

That emotion you seek
You know how it hinders
Upon my last breathe
You'll always be hither

A soul seeking
looking for life
Sees your eyes
Like fire in spite
All is lost
Lost is all
But you saved me
Unlike all
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#2
Wow. That's all I really have to say. I think that's really beautiful
#3
Thanks man. I finally figured out how to find inspiration and I guess it works.
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#4
its better than my songs and this is your first its better than my second one ha i liked it i can relate to it in different ways
#5
Ya, i try to write about stuff people can relate to, contrary to stuff about me. No one wants to hear about me. lol

Thanks for the feedback so far!
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#7
Well, I sit back and enjoy all the drama around me. I try my best to stay drama free, so I use other stuff like that.

This was based after my good friend and this chick, they both like each other but shes all weird about it, and has him like a puppet. Her emotions keep getting in the way, therefore the title.
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#9
Yeah its kinda funny too lol
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