#1
I'm gonna draw a picture,
A picture with a twist,
I'll draw it with a razor,
I'll draw it on my wrist,
And if it's done correctly,
A red line will appear,
Washing all my pain away,
Subtracting all my fear.

That's as far as I've gotten... please, ideas!!!
#2
those are perfect, dont change a thing,
Please collaborate these lyrics with NotoriousPac, you'd fit perfect on a song together
Ted: [Whispering to Bill] Your stepmom is cute.
Bill: Shut up, Ted.
Ted: Remember when she was a senior and we were freshmen?
Bill: Shut up, Ted!
#4
Wow, I really love this. Great flow, don't change a thing. But what could you do to add more? I'd say you could have the next stanza/verse a flashback to something that made you feel that way or something like that, but I really don't know where to go from there.
#5
LOLOLOL

is this srs bsnss?

Anyway, nice rhyme, short and sweet, quite simple.
Marijuana is the spice of life.

I Force Choke my penis when I masturbate.

8)-~
#7
it reminds me of a placebo song called.. "every me and every you"

theres a line that relates to this piece you wrote,

"Carve your name into my arm, instead of stressed i lye here charmed"

i supposed its the razor blade and arm part. i recommend listening to the song, maybe it will inspire some more lyrics
#10
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hoe bout this.......


BIRDS!!!!!!of the same feather!!!!!!makes!!!!A good FEATHER DUSTER!!!!!!


YEah! (,,), dude how's it huh did you like it guys?

Wtf?
#11
It's cute. I like the rhymes.

Like, what direction do you want to go with this?
There's only one girl in the world for you
and she probably lives in Tahiti.