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A song about suicide. Critique invited please.

Why?

Verse1

Never saw it as an easy beginning,
Never saw it as an easy end,
Never thought at all 'bout the songs we were singing,
Never thought of all the flowers you sent.

Bridge

Things aint movin now everything dont go my way,
Things aint movin now at all,
Things aint movin no-one hears a single word I say,
Now I know that i'm gonna fall.

Chorus

(Wh-y) Dont keep on laughin while i'm running away,
(Wh-y) Dont keep on movin to the cigarette sway,
So when youre lyin awake in youre room,
Doin the things that you do,
(Wh-y) Dont keep on laughin while i'm running away.

Verse 2

Sometimes people just see right through me,
Never hear a single word that I say,
But I never thought I could ever do it,
Now there's only one thing can stand in my way.


(Verse1-Bridge-Chorus-Verse2-Bridge-Chorus-Chorus-(Needs a middle 8!)-Chorus)