It may just be an acoustic demo but I liked the way it turned out. And yes, I know that my voice isn't the best.

You can listen to it on my band's myspace here.
Vocals are pitchy. Goes out of key sometimes. I'd try to sing the song at a higher pitch, it would be alot easier and it would sound better. Good quality though! Good base for a song, lyrics might need some work on rhyme/flow, but it's a good solid song, keep it up.

Crit mine? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=822784

2004 MIM Strat w/ Fender Hot Noiseless pickups
Sovtek MiG 60
Avatar 2x12 w/ Celestion Greenbacks
Snark Tuner
MXR Custom Comp
Fulltone Full-Drive 2
Dunlop JHM3 Univibe
TC electronic Nova Delay
TC electronic Arena Reverb